2021年3月14日托福独立写作真题范文 | 关于政府资助问题

2021年3月14日 

托福独立写作

【考场题目回忆】：

Who do you think most need and deserve financial help from the government?

1) people who just lost jobs；

2) young couple/ people who have children；

3) jobless people aged 70 or above.

【写作思路】

功利一点的观点比较容易展开写作，所以选择第2）个人群。毕竟第1）个人群很可能还有许多机会“咸鱼翻身”，第3）个人群可以用免费的看护来替代简单粗暴的金钱。

【Introduction】

Governmental financial support should consider young couples with dependents, compared with unemployed individuals, including those who recently lost their jobs and those who are above 70 years of age. This may sound unfair but may be the maximum result of the use of money.

【本段解析】

直接指出相对于其他两个人群，第2）个人群更值得政府的资金支持。

【Body】

Young parents could use the money to support their children. In the interest of those individual households, the money helps a lot, paying for children’s food, education and many other expenses. 然后两句展开阐述孩子要花钱。Young parents could use the money to buy things, and the country’s economy needs those households to spend. 然后两三句展开国家需要这样的家庭去消费。

【本段解析】 

从两个方面讨论这笔钱的意义。

At this point, as we take the broad and long view, the money has far-reaching significance, meaning more than helping those families, and it is to nurture（培育） the nation’s future, to boost（提升） the country’s economy and to strengthen the national fabric（国家结构/基础）. With those costs covered or partly covered, young working parents—the country’s backbone—would be grateful to the government, feeling supported, and committed to their jobs and the community.

【本段解析】

单独写一段去总结上一段的两个方面。

For those who have recently become unemployed, what the government should provide is not financial help; instead, the government should develop employment-help or career-help programs. 然后两句话阐述为什么他们需要的是职业/就业帮助，论证核心可以是“有手有脚、年富力强、会‘渔’重要”。For the old-aged jobless group, money directly given to their bank accounts may be a convenient solution but not the proper solution. This is because we should consider their old age as a greater factor than unemployment in causing their inabilities. Free or low-cost 24/7 care may be better help than money. 然后两句话阐述全日制看护对于这个人群的意义。

【本段解析】

“被抛弃”的两个人群放在同一个段落里讨论，不用赘述，关键点说到即可。

【Conclusion】

The aforementioned reasons represent a clear position: compared with any unemployed individuals, young couples with children deserve the government’s financial support. 

【本段解析】

不用重复文章主体部分的细节，避免赘述，作者的态度明确清晰即可。