2021年3月24日托福独立写作真题范文 | 关于老师教学

2021年3月24日 

托福独立写作

【考场题目回忆】：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?  

Young children (under 12 years of age) would get benefits if they are taught different subjects by different teachers every day.

【Introduction】

The statement covers a rather wide age range of child learners, including both pre-school children and the school-age ones. Since the age of six or seven is the start of formal education, young children mentioned in the statement should refer to predominantly the older ones, who are in elementary school. And in many American elementary schools, teaching different subjects by one teacher, as has been a convention, has a number of drawbacks. In response, schools should have different teachers teaching different disciplines.

【本段解析】：

开头段落首先明确了statement中模糊又宽泛的一个人群。两句话明确了人群（并且使得这个人群合理）后，行文要“快”，不要繁琐不要啰嗦不要拖沓，就是用尽量少的话语去把立场说清楚。比如这个开头两句话表明了立场，干脆利落清楚明确。

【Body】

Of the many limitations of the conventional arrangement, the first one may be that children are likely to get tired of seeing and listening to the one teacher all day and every day. Well, there may be the counterargument that children need the familiarity and sense of security that develop through bonding with the one same teacher. It sounds plausible yet does not make a strong case, because the intimacy can also develop between a child and each teacher but not necessarily only one teacher. In fact, when there is one teacher alone, children’s feeling may be just the opposite of the desired intimacy—boredom, as the teacher’s presence is on a highly repetitive basis of every class during every day, and the consequent aversion. This is one reason why schools need different teachers for different subjects. 

【本段解析】：

本段的论证方式是“反证法”，就是通过论证某件事情的反面是错误来正面某件事情本身是正确的。在这一段里，作者通过说明one teacher是不利的来说明different teachers是有利的。

To further the argument above, it is not difficult to see how boredom negatively affects children’s learning. It actually is a no-brainer that bored children can hardly learn well or learn anything. Since knowledge varies from subject to subject in terms of the nature, the structure, as well as the level of difficulty and cognition required, teaching should be accordingly diverse in terms of its methods and other aspects. And one teacher alone can hardly achieve the diversity and, instead, is inevitably monotonous in his or her method and style, making children disinterested in learning.

【本段解析】：

本段的论证方式依然是“反证法”。

I think that many teachers also want to adopt the new arrangement that each of them teaches one discipline or two instead all disciplines. Many teachers have reported that specialized teaching benefits child learners more than teaching the whole broad range of areas. In the elementary schools where I work long as an external contract consultant, teachers are advised to specialize in teaching numeracy or teaching literacy, and in those schools, cross-disciplinary teaching was abandoned years ago when they found that children’s performance was dissatisfactory although their teachers sure seem to know all. The years since the change have witnessed improvement in children’s learning, and the differentiation and specialization scheme has proved right and better. 

【本段解析】：

本段的论证方式是经典的“正向论证”。同时，这一段也有了举例论证。

【Conclusion】

There are problems with the conventional arrangement that children in elementary schools are taught different subjects by one teacher. Schools should instead designate different teachers for different disciplines.

【本段解析】：

结尾段落也要“快”，戒繁琐戒啰嗦戒拖沓。相反，到了文末，一切细节之前都已经被讨论过了，收尾更要干脆利落清楚明确。