4.25托福独立写作真题范文 I 向谁寻求建议

2021年4月25日 

托福独立写作

【考场题目回忆】：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting advice from friends your same age.

Typically, the young have more to learn from the old than the other way around. In this case, it is logical to seek advice to from friends who are older than us. However, we may feel uncomfortable talking about certain problems with them. In addition, the advice from them may not be adaptable. Hence, it is more desirable to seek advice from our peers. 

【写作思路】

本文的选择：向同辈人寻求建议。

开头段的写作也可以采取转折的思维，于是开头段前半部分先写了向年长者寻求建议也不错，再对这点进行驳回，zui后才给出了本文的选择。

【Introduction】

It would be unfair to completely dismiss friends older than us when we are looking for advice. After all, dealing with numerous challenges, they have rich experience that is valuable for us to learn. However, we should be aware that their experience may no longer be relevant. With time goes by, approaches they adopted to solve the previous challenges can be outdated, in which case the advice from them may hardly be applicable. Things can be different if we turn to our peers, who can offer a very different point of view than our older friends - and probably one better attuned to the tipping point of today’s challenge.

【本段解析】

段落前半部分呼应了开头段的前半部分的阐述。“However”之后的部分也呼应了开头段后半部分的驳斥。

这样的写作结构有助于增强段落间的衔接，也避免大家考试时写了前面忘了后面，写了后面忘了前面。

【Body】

In addition, in face of embarrassing problems,we are more comfortable and open talking to our peers about them, 【记得体现对比，即与同侪交谈的感受 VS 与年长朋友交谈的感受。这样才更扣题】and we feel differently with our older friends. This is because our peers are the ones who often hang out with us, and more importantly, they are supposed to be the ones who most understand our situation and what we really need. Not to mention, due to generation gap, friends older than us,【同样的，体现对比】as opposed to our peers, can hardly relate to us. 【说理完成后展开举例】Take my cousin of my own age as an example. He was once caught in an awkward situation, and he needed others’ advice to move on. 【例子部分也呼应前文的对比】Instead of talking to his mentor, which could make him feel embarrassed, he looked me for suggestions, not because I was more experienced but because I could identify what exactly was bothering him.

【Conclusion】

In conclusion, getting advice from our peers is better than being advised by our older friends, because friends of our same age are easier to talk to, and the suggestions they offer are up-to-date.

【本段解析】

总结段，重新阐述本文的选择+概括两段分论点即可。