支招小作文（73） | 柱图4：独立两年

数据图：【柱图】

考核点：如何描述【比较】

注意：

两个年份是独立的两个年份，不要当成连续时间。所以数据之间的关系不是线性的。

# Introduction

Shown in the bar chart is the percentage of British people making financial donations in two years – 1990 and 2010. And the people are divided into sub-groups by their age / are grouped by their age. Apparently, the general patten is that older people, with obvious greater percentages, were more likely to make donations than younger people.

* 老章提醒：注意下划线部分的语法现象：倒装。

* 老章提醒：注意绿色加粗字体部分的词汇用法。

# Body

In the year of 1990, roughly 42% of the British aged between 36 and 50 gave money to charity, and this percentage was higher than that in the other groups. In stark contrast, donors in the youngest group accounted for less than one-fifth. In the other three groups, the percentage varied slightly between 31% and 35%.

* 老章提醒：注意绿色加粗字体部分的词汇用法。

In the year of 2010, the highest percentage, which was almost 40%, was in the group of 51-65, and this number is in marked contrast tothe small number of 7%, which was again in the youngest group. The 40% also contrasted sharply with the percentage in the second youngest group, in which only a quarter of people donated money to charity. The other two groups both had 35% of people who made donations.

* 老章提醒：注意下划线部分的语法现象：非限定性定语从句来补充说明信息。

* 老章提醒：注意绿色加粗字体部分的词汇用法。

# Conclusion

At this point, it may be noticed that the year of 2010 witnessed an overall decline in the likelihood of making financial donations compared with 1990.

* 老章提醒：“at this point”的直译意思为“在这个点上”，意义是“上面说了那么多，那么到这里，（怎么怎么样了）”

* 老章提醒：总结部分的内容有难度。能学会就多拿分，不能学会就罢了也无妨。