支招小作文（86） | 饼图5 语言多样性

* 饼图，选自《剑桥雅思真题集11》

【内容思路】

通过找异同（similarities and differences）确定分组（groups）：

1）有一部分人是English monolingual。他们单独一组。

2）另一组是being able to speak at least one foreign language是绝 对主流（the overwhelming majority / dominant part）。绝 对主流这一组的内部，还有主流（Spanish-English bilinguals），同时，其它bilinguals或者trilingual speakers的百分比在一个区间内（in the range of 10% to 20%）。

Introduction

Shown in the pair of charts is the linguistic diversity of British students at one university in England, and the statistics/data are from two separate years – 2000 and 2010. Overall, there was a noticeable change in each language group except the German one.

* 第 一句的句子开头的倒装，可以当成套话用。

* 第 一句的句子末尾同位语。

Body（遵循【内容思路】来写）

In both years, students who are able to speak at least one foreign language were the overwhelming majority, and English monolingual speakers accounted for 10% and 20% respectively in those two years.

* 这一部分English monolingual的人，他们单独一组，那就干脆单独一个段落。

Among the bilinguals and trilingual students, being able to speak Spanish was the mainstream. In 2000, 30% of the students were Spanish-English bilinguals, and ten year later, their proportion increased to 35%. Secondly, French-English bilinguals, whose proportion was 15% in 2000, had a slightly decreased percentage (10%) in 2010, and German-English dual-language speakers remained 10% of all students. It is also worth noting that other bilinguals and trilingual students became proportionally more in 2010, accounting for 20% and 15% respectively.

* 第 一句话中，高亮标出的部分值得注意。不仅仅是用词，更重要的是避免了机械陈述数据本身，而是把数据情况解读为“mainstream”，超越了僵硬的数字表达。

* 在陈述数据的时候，要特别注意句型、词汇的变化，不要趋同。

Conclusion

In general, the difference between the two years is apparent.

* 小作文不要洋洋洒洒写太多。控制在180 words以内（本篇共计165 words）是老章一贯的原则。