支招小作文（89） | 表+饼 博物馆改造

* 表+饼，选自《剑桥雅思真题集11》

Introduction

Given in the table is the change of number of Ashdown Museum’s visitors between the year before and the year after the renovation, and the charts illustrates the change in the visitor satisfaction.

*解析

* 开头段落介绍图表的主题。如果是组合图表，那么就分成两个分句写。

* 第 一个分句的开头下划线处是倒装现象。

Body

After the refurbishment, the number of visitors increased to 92,000, compared with the previous 74,000. In fact, not only the number of visitors but also the overall satisfaction increased. Satisfied patrons, regardless of their level / degree of satisfaction, accounted for three quarters after the renovation, particularly thanks to the 20% increase in the proportion of highly satisfied visitors. Accordingly, the overall dissatisfaction rate saw a sharp fall from an alarming level (50%) to 20%, and that improvement is chiefly attributed to the 25% reduction in the portion of visitors who show moderate discontent. In addition, those who give no response to the survey remained an insignificant portion of all visitors.

*解析

* 由于表格中的内容十分简单，一句话就写完了，所以，没有单独写一个段落。

* 第二句话的开头处的“in fact”，老章提醒：尤其值得注意。这是一个用来引导“递进关系”的逻辑连接词。

* 第三句话中，句尾是由“thanks to”引导的“原因状语”。

* 第四句话的开头处的“Accordingly”，老章也是提醒：尤其值得注意。这是用来描述“基于前一句所述，而对应发生的情况”的逻辑连接词。

* 第四句话中，后一个分句中的“that improvement”指代的是前一个分句中的“a sharp fall”，老章提醒：仔细琢磨，为什么“fall”是“improvement”？

* 最后一句话的开头处，用了“in addition”。老章觉得你一定懂，无需赘述。

* 最后，老章提醒：1）文中3处逻辑连接词，以及指代，用来连贯文章脉络。2）主体部分段落中，下划线的部分是想你注意句子主语的变换。

Conclusion

Overall, the improvement in the two dimensions has been substantial after the refurbishment.

*解析

* 对于图表的总述是小作文必不可少的内容。

* 当然，所有红色标出的词汇，要查、要记、要学、要用。