支招小作文（91） | 地图 某公园的过去与现在

* 地图，选自《剑桥雅思真题集14》

Shown in the pair of maps are the original layout of the Grange Park and its current view. Overall, there have been evident changes. 

* 表达程度的形容词，不仅仅有“大”、“小”。

* 选择合适的视角去写作：1）俯瞰/鸟瞰（“上帝”视角）对应“东南西北”；2）置身其中（“访客”视角），对应“前后左右”和“东南西北”；3）混合视角，前两种视角混合。

建议用第2）种视角，更好写作。

* 不要依次写两张图，而是拿后一张图比较于第 一张图。

* 有些信息需要“模糊处理”。

Today, a visitor, entering the park through either the Eldon Street entrance or the Arnold Avenue entrance, will no longer find the fountain but instead immediately see a rose garden that is situated/positioned. in the central area of the park. In addition, there are seats surrounding the garden. As the visitor reaches the garden, he or she will find an amphitheater a few steps to the westas the replacement of themusical stage. Right next to the theater is another rose garden of a smaller size, which is the original garden near the north entrance. In addition, the rose garden on the south side and all the seats have been removed. 

The area that is east of the central rose garden also has had a tremendous change. Where there used to be a glasshouse, there now is a water feature located in the southeast corner. Opposite it and across the park, a cafe and a children’s playground have replaced the aquatic plant pond and the rose garden. What is more, there is an additional underground car park, which provides another entrance for visitors, and it is in the immediate vicinity / proximity of the water feature.

* 注意时态：现在完成时。

* 主体部分的两个段落中，黄色高亮的部分值得注意：是把过往的情况容入到描述现在情况的句子中去写，很考验语法和句型的使用。

Overall, there have been evident changes in a number of places, and the park’s layout has been simplified.

* 对于地图的总述，就是写变化的大小。