12月24日雅思大作文示范写作 | 什么是理想国

2022年12月24日雅思大作文题目

What do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in the modern world? How can people work towards achieving an ideal society?

范文及解析

Introduction

In the course of human civilisation, we have entertained different ideas of what a utopian society should be like and what the most vital component is. Personally, leadership by wise and righteous people plays the leading role, and to this end, leadership qualities should be fostered in the local settings.

解析

平安夜考试的话题着实抽象。审题时同时需注意：第一问里问most important element，出现最高级，即在论述过程中，起码三者比较才能出个“最”。而第二问，与第一问是“目的与手段”的逻辑关系，第二问要回应第一问的答案，才是好的任务回应。

Ø course n. 进展，进程

Ø entertain vt. 持有，怀有

Ø utopian adj. 乌托邦的

Ø leadership qualities 领导素质

Body 1

Two characteristics may be considered as the predominant ingredients of a utopia – a fair legal system and freedom of speech. For the former, if a criminal could be tried and convicted in a just process and, according to the law, given corresponding punishments, such as community service or imprisonment, then citizens will trust the judicial system since all the culprits will pay the price for their offence. Such trust in the judicial system in the long term will contribute to social soundness. As for freedom of speech, it enables the press or a citizen to show the wrongdoings of one or some specific authorities. This gives a chance for careful inquiries to ensure the transparency of the authority. Thus, corruption can be hampered. However, both of two elements largely depend on leaderships who uphold the spirit of serving the people. In other words, only with selfless leaders in an array of fields can individuals’ voices be heard, and the society be regulated in a fair way. Leaders can accept the criticism and ponder over citizens’ comments on the decisions and policies they have made, seeking for the agreements of the general public and balancing the interests of all parties.

解析

要素1：完善的司法体系 à 公平地判处罪犯 à 增加人民对于司法系统的信任，有利于社会稳定；要素2：言论自由 à 媒体和公众能够指出权威机构的错处 à 增加了透明度 à 防止腐败；// 两者的实现，都离不开服务于民的无私的领导班子

Ø ingredient n. (成功的)因素，要素

Ø try vt. 审理；审判

Ø convict vt. 定罪，宣判…有罪

Ø just adj. 公正的，正义的

Ø imprisonment n. 监狱关押

Ø culprit n. 罪犯

Ø pay the price for… 为…付出代价

Ø offence n. 罪行

Ø wrongdoing n. 坏事；不法行径

Ø inquiry n. 调查

Ø transparency n. 透明度

Ø corruption n. 腐败；贪污

Ø hamper vt. 阻止，妨碍

Ø leadership n. 领导班子，领导层

Ø ponder (over) v. 仔细考虑

Ø interest n. 利益

Body 2

To achieve this, judicious and selfless leaders should view the demands of its people at the local level. To illustrate, leaders should be selected from the talents in each field and elected by the public. Those nominees have witnessed or experienced in person what obstacles the public are confronted with and thus have a clear idea of what kinds of policies and strategies should be made to best accord with the communal benefits. For instance, a leader of the agricultural department should clearly know the local climate, the growth rhythm of crops, and pest control, and thus can lead the locals to harvest high crop yields. Only in this way can leaders win the approval of the public, which will further help them develop trustworthy relationships with other groups.

解析

领导层从基础群众角度看问题：各个领域的领导人由该领域的杰出人物所担任，亲历过相关群体的经历，了解他们的所思所感，才能做出更契合大众福祉的政策。

Ø judicious adj. 明断的

Ø nominee n. 提名者，候选人

Ø obstacle n. 困难

Ø communal adj. 公共的

Ø yield n. 产量

Conclusion

In a nutshell, wise and judgmatical leadership is the most essential element of an ideal society, and to achieve this, leaders with abundant local experience should be selected.

解析

重申观点

Ø judgmatical adj. 明断的; 周到的