支招小作文（103） | 柱图 08年英国本硕毕业去向

柱图/条状图】，一定可以【转化】为【表格】，如下：

但是，【柱图/条状图】的表现【优势】在于【直观】。

【开头段】通常两句话：

1. Shown in the pair of bar chart are the four destinations of UK graduates and postgraduates except full-time employment, and the year of 2008 is taken a look at.

2. Overall, students’ preference varied to a notable extent within each group of students, and there is a striking similarity between the two groups.

Ø 句话：说明【图的主题】。and前为完全倒装，正常语序是：XXX are shown in the…。同时注意，题目中给出的时间状语，可以在转述时拆开，写成单独一句。同理，有的题目，不拆时间状语，而是拆地点状语写成单独一句。

Ø 第二句话：写对于图中数据的【宏观综述】。

【主体部分段】写上图与下图的中间两根柱子（从而形成对比关系）：

1. Among graduates, voluntary work was the least desirable choice, with only 3,500 students choosing it.

2. By stark contrast, the number of students who chose to pursue a further degree was up to almost 30,000.

3. Likewise, this marked contrast could also be found among postgraduates.

4. Voluntary work was chosen by merely 345 students, compared sharply with more than 2,700 students choosing further study.

Ø 注意下划线的部分：1）丰富句子主语；2）【伴随状语】的使用，来补充说明一些信息。

Ø 句话：with引导的独立主格，动词和主语是主动关系，直接改为v.ing即可。

Ø 第二句话：注意写XXX is XXX 的句子时，一定要检查，主语和表语是否是“是”的关系，比如：数字（the number）是30,000。

Ø 第三句话：呈上启下，说明研究生里也存在和本科生里一样的差距大的情况。

【主体部分第二段】写上图与下图的外侧两根柱子：

1. It is also noticeable that part-time employment was the second popular choice in both groups of students.

2. It was the choice of roughly 18,000 graduates and more than 2,500 postgraduates.

3. In addition, over 16,000 graduates were unemployed, and the number among postgraduates was 1,625.

Ø 注意下划线的部分：丰富句子主语。

Ø 句话：it作形式主语的主语从句，指代that后面的从句。

Ø 第二句话：it指代前文的part-time employment/ the second popular choice。

【结尾段】通常一句话：

1. In general, both the disparity and the similarity were apparent.

Ø 重申对于图中数据的【宏观综述】。